Can you rate the beginning of my new rap?

I'm not gonna be a hater, but I will be honest on saying it's horrible. But thats alright for now, if you honestly have a pion on rap try studying the history and content a real rap must contain. Thats what I've done, and it's helped a lot. So if it's something you want to do with your life, start learning. At least you can rhyme.. :P